First, i apologize for taking so long, second, thank you very much. I would have got back to you earlier, but an assortment of homework, and something dreadful called society, kept getting in the way.

Thanks a lot for the advice, looking back, it does sound unrealistic, but for now I shall leave that scene alone as I don't know what to replace it with.

I shall look up this sentence, because I am fascinated. in other news though,I emailed a war poem I once wrote to one of mums friends who also writes (But he writes incredibly formidable looking poetry about incredibly deep subjects that contain metaphors within metaphors and the like. I only send him things are serious.) and he sent it to his best mate who works in a recording studio, and it got put on a CD with some randomer singing it. it's very folky, you might like it.

Lastly, did you ever read The Lottery? I know I've asked before, but I forgot. I actually read it, after thinking about how amazing it was as a concept and not wanting to be disappointing and putting it off. I wasn't disappointing, it was pretty amazing.